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Rain Dancer

So many things to do
But I canít concentrate tonight
Somehow I canít convince myself
That everything will be all right
I donít think Iíll be ok
And all my friends seem to know
But the only one here to call on me
Is the rain, rapping on my window

And through the rippling glass
Again, I sit and stare
Down the empty city streets
And sure enough, sheís there
In pigtails and pink ribbons
Ignorant of her age
Dancing for her unseen audience
Upon the asphalt stage

Tell me little figurant
How to dance beside my dreams
How to hear laughter though my tears
Teach me nothingís as it seems
And make me believe it,
Beautiful rain dancer
Let me spend some time with you
Tell me why I act this way
And do the things I do

Then teach me how to be like you

Little ballerina
Teach me to dance in the rain
Tie ribbons in my hair
And let me be like you again

       Free me from my pragmatic chain
This poem is at least 2 years old now, but that's ok. I'm leaving now, I'm not really sure when I'll be back. So far I've given all my old watchers a little something but my poetry friends. So here's one of the first poems I ever posted on DA back on my old account. It's not long, but I hope you enjoy it now as much as you did two years ago.

I've discouraged critique this time. I've had this piece critiqued over and over and over and over and this time I'd just like it to be. Take it for what it is or leave it alone.

Image is from public domain stock site.
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:iconjimcarlene:
jimcarlene Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011
hi, how can i upload a poem here on DA?

i'm having a hard time on doing so.
Thank you in advance Sir.
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Alura-the-Sage Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
One way you can upload a poem is to go into Sta.sh writer and type it in, or you can copy and paste the words into Sta.sh writer.
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sambees Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011
By submitting the properly formated document to the poem section in the categories.
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moto-jahk-fwah Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
and you may never know that the light you shone was a beacon for some unseen stranger... even if for just a moment.
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Red-banner Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2011
This is so wonderful. Especially the extended metaphor in the last lines of the second stanza. *claps*

It's almost inspiring. Scratch that. It IS inspiring.
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danelstoryteller Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010  Student Writer
very nice
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danelstoryteller Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010  Student Writer
very nice
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1Walkingblind Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2009
You can draw and write....thats amazing and a beautiful
combination.....I really enjoyed this it's really gorgeous.
I love to write it's who I am a writer and I'm happy to have
stumbled upon this....beautiful
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PrincessNuba Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2009   Writer
Really beautiful :D
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Squirrelshters Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
BREATHTAKING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :heart: :+fav:
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:iconmad133:
mad133 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2008
That's beautiful absolutely beautiful.
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shaikhara Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2008
love it...
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sodawitch Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2008
:)amazingly beautiful :)
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
brilliant!
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:iconfallen-fires:
Fallen-Fires Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008  Student General Artist
Simply beautiful.
<3 If only we all were free.
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Springheels-Jack Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2007
Wonderful, I love it.
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citrusgirl Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2007
ur a great writer!
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BlackList-Artist Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2007
Lovely. Simply Lovely.
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Roxshard Featured By Owner May 27, 2007
Don`t know what to say ...
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AlltheArts Featured By Owner May 25, 2007
I like it just as it is
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agreatpenname Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
^^ I loved this poem very much, it hit home right to the ol' corazon o.x and as it brought out emotions, it had a whimsical feel to it as well. Wonderfully done :+fav:
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FaronKaos Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2006
Wow, how'd I miss this when I browsed your gallery? This is very beautiful. You should do poetry more often, you're a wonderful writer. :) Very emotional.

This has got to be the best piece of poetry I've read in a lo~ong time.
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rikulover89 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2006   Photographer
::hearts:: i just love it it filled with so many different feelings its just so amazing
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Raccuun Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2006
OMG this is so stunning! Most people don't know how to rhyme tastefully, and they do it because they can. But this fits so well with the whole poem though! I really like it. I got a very melancholy feeling when I read it though ;__;! <3 Your poems are always amazing. :hug:
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chocoholic-girl Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2006
the first paragraph/ section (thingy??) is rather poignient to me :blushes:
i like it, its given me a lil more inspiration for an upcoming piece, can i quote it? =)
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sambees Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2006
Sure :3
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chocoholic-girl Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2006
thankee :D
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bunrymay Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2006
really good very touching
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ichigo-oishii Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2006
... *being speech less*

greetz ichigo
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fay2006 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2006  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love it:clap:
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Angel106 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2006
I think this is great. Real expresive and and great imagery. It even has a nice flow to it. Great job.
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okamiwind Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2006
that's awesome! i love dancing in the rain. ^^ except i live on a golf course....i hope people don't watch me. XDD
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esquared Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2006
Awwwwww. It's really pretty. <33 I saw this girl running around all hyper-happy and dancing in a store today. she made me feel the same way. :]
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Arisusa-02 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2006
Wow, that was beautiful. :heart:
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ScottishRose Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2006
:hug: miss ya. and I like it. I know what you mean about critique as a poet myself lol
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Kashi-kun Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2006
It's beautiful in my opinion
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:iconsohalia:
sohalia Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like it. It has a nice rythm and theme. Good work.
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ramy Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2006
I'm sure you remember my obsessing over this the first time I saw it, and since it's been a while since I saw it, it's like it's new again. <3 good luck in toronto, hopefully will talk to you soon
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sambees Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2006
I really hope so ;___;
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:iconnanael:
Nanael Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2006  Professional General Artist
:D :D :D
may i draw a ballerina for this???
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:iconsambees:
sambees Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2006
Have at it :3

Let me see when it's done?
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:iconnanael:
Nanael Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2006  Professional General Artist
yup, :D I will let u know :D
:w00t: :w00t:
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myself-1419 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2006
wow. it's fantastic. i love it. =D :floating:
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InsideMyMind Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2006
i really like it. i love poetry and i'm usually so specific on how it should be but i honestly find NOTHING wrong with this poem. i love it as it is. you did a great job.
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Suona08 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2006
I like it a lot. It's a wonderful poem and the words flow very nicely. Keep up the good work and have a safe trip
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alia04 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2006
I really like it, it's not too long and it flows really well. Wonderful!
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Pabbit-da-rabbit Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2006
This is gorgeous. It is such a nice poem, flowing and full of meaning. I can just the little dancer out in the rain, dancing despite the downpour. Beautiful.
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ftepainting Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2006
Wow, awesome piece!! I like it. very beautiful! :) :+favlove:
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WoWKrynne Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2006  Student
Wow so beautiful.
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Yoshi-Star Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2006
loved it.
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